I feel defeated and so lost

Like I am being tumbled

and tossed

Give me a chance

that’s all I ask

in advance

So I can


what I need 

to try



About kwicksand

Sinking in the quicksand of my thoughts. ~David Bowie
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6 Responses to loser

  1. emesque says:

    I like the “chance” and “advance” rhyme. Well done.

  2. Cubby says:

    It reminded me of a garden salad when I read “tumbled and tossed”. I hate it when people overdress my salad, not that I am much of a salad eater, but nothing worse than a salad drowning in dressing. Not sure how you rectify that.

  3. love the rythmic pattern; the way the words rhyme with each other. thanks for sharing.

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